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Názor na motivační dopis Erasmus

 

Dobrý den, najde se tu někdo kdo je tak laskavý a přečte si můj motivační dopis a upozornit mě na nedostatky? Předem díky za každý komentář !!

Dear Sir or Madam,

With this cover letter I would like to express my interest in the Erasmus programme to get a chance to study for one semester abroad.

I am nineteen years old and I am currently in my first year of studying at the Faculty of Electrical Engineering and Communication Brno. As my study programme I have chosen Automation and Measurement.

There are several reasons why I decided to apply for this program. Firstly, I believe that this is unique opportunity to deeply experience different culture and lifestyle. Also it would be great chance to learn new language and enrich my curriculum vitae, as well as gain more independence.

I have been learning English for 10 years as my first foreign language and I think that speaking with native speakers without any chance of using my native language is definitely the best way how to improve my English skills.

The Erasmus program seems like a great way to meet other students from Europe. I think that living and studying with this international group of students will help me to broaden my horizons. Last but not least, it would be honour for me if I get a chance to study on Universities where taught or studied great personalities such as Alexander Graham Bell, Tomáš Garrigue Masaryk or Jaroslav Heyrovský. This aspect would be very motivating and inspirational for me and I believe that it could help me in overcoming future challenges such as bachelor's and master's thesis.

The experience that I could gain by chance to study in foreign country would be valuable for my future studies and personal development. I would be very grateful if you consider my application and give me chance to represent our university as one of the best in the Europe.

Thank you for considering my request.

Yours sincerely,

horczech

mně se to docela líbí. Nějaký malé chybky jsem našel. Možná další doplní nebo opraví. At se daří.

Dear Sir or Madam,
With this cover letter I would like to express my interest in the Erasmus programme to get a chance to study for one semester abroad. I am nineteen years old and I am currently in my first year of studying at the Faculty of Electrical Engineering and Communication Brno. As my study programme I have chosen Automation and Measurement. There are several reasons why I've decided to apply for this program. Firstly, I believe that this is a unique opportunity to deeply experience different culture and lifestyle. Also it would be a great chance to learn a new language Ifdidn't get to study in the Great Britain. I have been learning English for 10 years as my first foreign language and I think that speaking with native speakers without any chance of using my native language is definitely the best way how to improve my English skills. The Erasmus program seems like a great way to meet other students from Europe. I think that living and studying with this international group of students will help me to broaden my horizons. Last but not least, it would be an honour for me if I got a chance to study at Universities where great personalities such as Alexander Graham Bell, Tomáš Garrigue Masaryk or Jaroslav Heyrovský taught or studied . This aspect would be very motivating and inspiring for me and I believe that it could help me in overcoming future challenges such as bachelor's and master's thesis. The experience that I could gain by the chance to study abroad would be valuable for my future studies and personal development. I would be very grateful if you considered my application and give me a chance to represent our university as one of the best in the Europe. Thank you for considering my request. Yours sincerely, horczech

Odkaz na příspěvek Příspěvek od swimmer vložený před 11 lety

mně se to docela líbí. Nějaký malé chybky jsem našel. Možná další doplní nebo opraví. At se daří.

Dear Sir or Madam,
With this cover letter I would like to express my interest in the Erasmus programme to get a chance to study for one semester abroad. I am nineteen years old and I am currently in my first year of studying at the Faculty of Electrical Engineering and Communication Brno. As my study programme I have chosen Automation and Measurement. There are several reasons why I've decided to apply for this program. Firstly, I believe that this is a unique opportunity to deeply experience different culture and lifestyle. Also it would be a great chance to learn a new language Ifdidn't get to study in the Great Britain. I have been learning English for 10 years as my first foreign language and I think that speaking with native speakers without any chance of using my native language is definitely the best way how to improve my English skills. The Erasmus program seems like a great way to meet other students from Europe. I think that living and studying with this international group of students will help me to broaden my horizons. Last but not least, it would be an honour for me if I got a chance to study at Universities where great personalities such as Alexander Graham Bell, Tomáš Garrigue Masaryk or Jaroslav Heyrovský taught or studied . This aspect would be very motivating and inspiring for me and I believe that it could help me in overcoming future challenges such as bachelor's and master's thesis. The experience that I could gain by the chance to study abroad would be valuable for my future studies and personal development. I would be very grateful if you considered my application and give me a chance to represent our university as one of the best in the Europe. Thank you for considering my request. Yours sincerely, horczech

Díky ! Musím uznat že z tvojí angličtiny jde fakt respekt. Třeba jsem přemýšlel skoro 10 min proč jsi dal před “an honour” a ne “a honour”. Sem myslel že to záleží na tom jestli to slovo začíná samohláskou nebo souhláskou, ale ono to záleží na výslovnosti… Jsi fakt profík, to ses naučil ve škole, v rámci nějakého certifikátu nebo je to “škola praxí” ?

Myslím, že to tak není. Tady jsou úplně jiní profíci než já:-).They are out of my league. Členama se neláme něčí angličtina. Udělal jsi pár chyb v kondicionálu, jinak máš naprosto v pohodě angličtinu. Ale rozhodně si počkej na další, můžou na to mít jiný názor a spoustu věcí mohou uvést na správnou míru.

Vše už skvěle řekl swimmer, jen bych dodala, že tvůj motivační dopis působí dost formálně (což je fajn) a ve formálním projevu se preferuje používání nestažených tvarů, takže bych osobně byla pro “I have decided místo I've decided” a “I did not místo I didn't” atd. Mě osobně to vždy praští do očí, ale to je jen můj názor! Dobrá práce, fakt:)

Odkaz na příspěvek Příspěvek od Mirrore vložený před 11 lety

Vše už skvěle řekl swimmer, jen bych dodala, že tvůj motivační dopis působí dost formálně (což je fajn) a ve formálním projevu se preferuje používání nestažených tvarů, takže bych osobně byla pro “I have decided místo I've decided” a “I did not místo I didn't” atd. Mě osobně to vždy praští do očí, ale to je jen můj názor! Dobrá práce, fakt:)

Máte naprosto pravdu, nestažené tvary jsou lepší. Já píšu docela poskrovnu.

a bachelor's and master's thesis

 

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