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My favourite physicist In this essay I will devote to Stephen Hawking, who I consider as my favourite physicist. I was amazed, when I saw a film The Theory of Everything, British biographical drama deals with life of Stephen Hawking.

Stephen Hawking was born in Oxford on three hundredth anniversary of death Galileo on January 8th 1942. His parents were Isobel and a researcher in tropical medicine Frank Hawking. Stephen grew up with two younger, Phillippa and Mary, sisters and an adopted brother Edward in a highly educated family.

Stephen has enjoyed math and science his childhood. He couldn’t study math at university, because in Oxford wasn’t a math degree at the time, so he chose physics and chemistry instead. Thereafter he studied cosmology at university in Cambridge.

He was diagnosed with Amyotrophic lateral sclerosis and given two years to live. Although he was depressed over his diagnosis, he began to study and work harder than ever before. In this time he fell in love with Jane Wilde. She and his work were reasons to live. They have three children together. Hawking has become paralyzed and he has spoken since 1990 thanks voice synthesizer.

Hawking made his first major contribution to science with his idea of singularity – a place in space or time at which some quantity becomes infinite. He studied black holes and found Hawking’s radi­ation.

In conclusion I would write I admire Stephen Hawking especially for his optimistic access to life despite his handicap and for writing popular science books.

1. I will devote this essay to… (bez předložky “in”)
2. …who I consider as my favourite…
3. I was amazed when (bez čárky) I saw the film… / the Theory of Everything film
4. biographical drama that deals with…
5. on the 13th anniversary of Galileo's death
6. His parents were Isobel and Frank Hawking, a researcher… (gramaticky tam není špatně nic, jen mi to takhle přijde lepší stylisticky)
7. with two younger sisters, Philippa and Mary, and an adopted brother Edward, in…
8. Stephen has enjoyed math and science during his childhood (nemůže být předpřítomný čas, je dané časové období – jeho dětství)
9. because in Oxford there was no such thing as a math degree / there wasn't a math degree
10. Thereafter, he studied cosmology at the University of Cambridge
11. he was depressed about his diagnosis
12. At that time, he fell…
13. They had three children together
14. …and (he) has been speaking thanks to a voice synthezator since 1990
15. In conclusion, I would say
16. Ne access, ale třeba atitude, approach, stance on
17. Spíš scientific books

Mockrát děkuji a u té 8. prosím, když chci říct, že ho bavila matematika a věda už od dětství, tak mohlo by to být: He has enjoyed math and science since he was boy.?

ano, “since he was a boy”, nebo “a kid / a child”

Děkuji Takhle?

I will devote this essay to Stephen Hawking, who I consider my favourite physicist. I was amazed when I saw The Theory of Everything, British biographical drama that deals with life of Stephen Hawking.

Stephen Hawking was born in Oxford on the 300th anniversary of Galileo’s death on January 8th 1942. His parents were Isobel and Frank Hawking, a researcher in tropical medicine. Stephen grew up with two younger sisters, Phillippa and Mary, and an adopted brother Edward in a highly educated family.

Stephen enjoyed math and science since he was a child. He couldn’t study math at university, because in Oxford there wasn’t a math degree at the time, so he chose physics and chemistry instead. Thereafter, he studied cosmology at the University of Cambridge.

He was diagnosed with Amyotrophic lateral sclerosis and given two years to live. Although he was depressed about his diagnosis, he began to study and work harder than ever before. At that time, he fell in love with Jane Wilde. She and his work were reasons to live. They had three children together. Hawking has become paralyzed and has been speaking thanks to voice synthesizer since 1990.

Hawking made his first major contribution to science with his idea of singularity – a place in space or time at which some quantity becomes infinite. He studied black holes and found Hawking’s radi­ation.

In conclusion I would say I admire Stephen Hawking especially for his optimistic attitude to life despite his handicap and for writing scientific books.

deals with the life of Stephen Hawking
adopted brother Edward, in a highly educated family

Jinak v pořádku.

Moc moc děkuji

asi by som dala

on January 8th, 1942

at university because /bez ciarky/

In conclusion,

Kromě té první úpravy už to vše v podstatě píši výše. S tou univerzitou jsou dvě možnosti, buď jak píšete Vy, pokud máte na mysli obecně “studoval na VŠ” nebo, když konkretizujete tu univerzitu (Cambridge) tak je pak pravopis tak, jak také píši výše.

Daniel, to som sem dala len pre uplnost, ide o ciarky, nic ine. Najprv som tam dala este nieco, ale potom som si vsimla, ze to tu uz je, tak som to upravovala.